Descriptive as MEOW!
Sitting lazily on my bed-side table he looks at me with a calm sense of humor, and sleepiness, as I turn around,almost as if he knew this was about him. He flicks his brown-black striped ears, and tries to lick the white cross of fur on his face, which extends down his neck and throughout his belly (which i might add is quite big. He is one fat cat) and surrounding his legs and arms. He slides down the side of the couch, meow-yawns, and walks unto my bed and lies down as if he owned the place.
Most of the time he is sleeping in the middle of a walkway, laying on your typing hand,outside begging neighbors for food, or begging the giant monsters to feed him or give him his favorite treat.. the milk. (notice the "the" in front of milk, he takes this quite seriously you know), if he manages to look pitiful enough or annoy the sh*t out of anyone near the kitchen, that is. His day consists of:
1. Sleeping
He loves to be picked up, since he is so heavy and can hardly climb trees anymore, but not in public or in front of his cat-friends.When picked up he will proceed to do, two, things. Kick and squirm until you understand that no matter what you do, you will not win. Or. Slump into your embrace and start purring. The great rumbling had to have been a miniature rocket launch, its so loud! He will only let you picking him up after you play a game of tag or hid'n'go seek with him, but he will always wander into a room filled with guests looking nonchalant and unworried. Then, he attracts all the attention the room has to offer, order a milk-to-go and strut away.
1. Sleeping
2. Eating
4. Begging to go outside
5. Begging to go inside
6. Begging to outside again
7. Begging to inside again
8. Begging to outside AGAIN
9. Begging to inside AGAIN
10. Eating
11. Pleading for milk
12. Drinking (milk of course)
13. Drinking from my bathroom facet
14. Annoying me while I write this...
His mother, Stinky (named after her farts and the tendency to roll in dirt), will scold him with a stoke of her paw. She is pure white with yellow eyes that he inherited. Ohhhh! he just walked on my laptop. I almost forgot to tell you his name: John Frederick Shilling III or "jon jon" or "baby jon" for short.
Dear Francisco,
ReplyDeleteI really liked your piece, "Descriptive as MEOW!" I like it one because I want a cat and I don't have one, and two because it is very informal. One descriptive line you wrote that stands out for me is: "The great rumbling had to have been a miniature rocket launch, its so loud!" I think it really gives the reader a perspective on how you portray your cat's purring. One syntactical choice you made that I liked was how you used interruptions a lot. the one that stuck out to me was, "e flicks his brown-black striped ears, and tries to lick the white cross of fur on his face, which extends down his neck and throughout his belly (which i might add is quite big. He is one fat cat) and surrounding his legs and arms." I think it really emphasizes how he really is fat and the fur stretches really far. Thanks for writing this great piece, and I look forward to seeing more stuff maybe even about your cat.
Tim Skerry
Dear Francisco:
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your piece, "Descriptive as MEOW!" because I own cats and can relate to this. One descriptive line you wrote that stands out for me is: "The great rumbling had to have been a miniature rocket launch, its so loud!" I think this is good because the descriptions you used really give me an idea of how loud he purrs. I also appreciated your syntax. One syntactical choice you used was interruptions in the line: "Most of the time he is sleeping in the middle of a walkway, laying on your typing hand,outside begging neighbors for food, or begging the giant monsters to feed him or give him his favorite treat.. the milk. (notice the "the" in front of milk, he takes this quite seriously you know), if he manages to look pitiful enough or annoy the sh*t out of anyone near the kitchen, that is." It really helped to bring some more humor into the piece and makes the piece more conversational. Thanks for writing. I look forward to what you post next because this was very well written and interesting.
-Charles Tan
Dear Francisco,
ReplyDeleteI liked your piece, "Descriptive as MEOW!" because I really like cats, so I liked this of course. One descriptive line you wrote that stands out for me is: "He loves to be picked up, since he is so heavy and can hardly climb trees anymore, but not in public or in front of his cat-friends," I think this is funny because it gives the cat, Jon Jon, a sense of being a teenager. I also really appreciated the syntax of your piece. One syntactical choice you made that was effective was the many interruptions in your piece. It really helped to clear up things. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because you have a unique sense of writing.
Ben Rodrigue